Thursday, August 11, 2011

Plane: Dystopian

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Plane: Dystopian

Crookshanks Harry leaned into his tool, urging his whole body softly against the knot in the wood.  “Wot’s it gonna be, then?” he asked.
He had imagined the Lord Protector as a towering, imposing figure.  Instead, Cromwell looked like a farmer, and not a very handsome one.  And his voice sounded like shattering glass and twisting wire.  “The prototipos, as the Greeks would say.  The first of my New Model Army.”
Harry hawked and spat into the sawdust.  “Wot’s that?  I’ve seen a model building afore.  It was tiny.  That Wren bugger wanted to patch up St. Paul’s, dinne?”
“He did,” Cromwell agreed.
“Only this thing ain’t tiny.  It’s… it’s huge.  Well, it’s a man, innit?”  Harry spat again and looked at the thing he was working on.  It was like a marionette, but the size of an adult man.  He’d finished his work, but for this last knot.  At least the thing didn’t have a face, Harry decided.  That would have made him feel decidedly uncomfortable.  “Bloody ’Ell.”
“It isn’t quite a man,” Cromwell corrected him.  “Think of it as a house.”
“An ’ouse the size and shape of a man.  God’s wounds, that’s a new one.”  Harry worked the knot down a little more.  “Almost done, ’ere.”
“Or a suit of clothes,” the Lord Protector continued.  “For a being from another plane.”
“Another plane?  Like wot, like a demon?”  Harry crossed himself before he spat this time.  “That’s wrong, that is.  That’s cock-eyed.”
“No, it isn’t,” Cromwell said.  His smile was gentle.  “It’s perfect.  God is the great dystopian, not I.  He wishes his creatures to hop and flap and hobble about on crutches—” he gestures at Harry’s own crutch in the corner, “and suffer.  I will redeem the world.  I will rid it of its imperfections.”
Harry laughed nervously.  “With this ’ouse for a demon, shaped like a man?  God’s hooks, I almost believe you.”  He didn’t, though, not quite.  He thought the Lord Protector was mad.
“Almost.”  Cromwell smiled again, reassuring.  “John Churchhill and his cavaliers want to hold on to the world as it is, but they are profoundly mistaken.  I will redeem this flawed creation with my New Model Army.  I come not to send peace, but a sword.”
Harry spat.  The knot was almost gone now.  “’Ow’s it work, then?”
“A sacrifice is always necessary.”
Harry worked the knot.  “Wot, to summon the… the demon?”
“To perfect the world.”
Harry eased over the knot one final time and it was gone.  As the knot disappeared, he thought he heard the faint rasp of metal behind him.
“There she is.”  He set the plane down.  “Perfect.”
Harry turned back to Cromwell.  His eyes caught the flash of steel as the Lord Protector sank his dagger into the carpenter’s belly.
Cromwell eased Crookshanks Harry backward.  The crafter tried to speak, tried to object, but blood gurgled in his throat.  Blood poured down his chest and belly, soaked his tunic, stained the wood of the perfect mannequin.
Incredibly, as his life seeped out of him, Harry thought he felt the dummy twitch.  “Thank you,” Cromwell’s voice was gentle.  “I will remember that you were the first.”



Wednesday, August 10, 2011

My Daughter Writes a Short Story


Witchy Lovecraft

The gods of this New World are very real.  Our priests, and some of the Firstborn, will tell you that they are but the angels and devils of our own Bible.  I have heard the Pueblo, though, and old secret keepers among the Algonks, say that they are divine and demonic powers in their own right and unbeholden to our Maker.  What the truth is, I know not, but I know enough to be wary.  

– Reverend Howard Phillips Lovecraft, “Sermon on the
   Fragility of the Kingdoms of the Children of Adam”

Tuesday, August 9, 2011

The Adults Problem

Plot is a character fighting obstacles to achieve a goal.

The Adults Problem (I am making up my own technical term here) is a problem in writing middle grade / middle reader fiction (herafter, MG).  In MG, you want your protagonist to be a kid.  And you want your protagonist to face and solve his own problems.

Which means that your kid either has to have no adults around (he's an orphan, he's lost, he's at boarding school), or the adults are the badguys or the adults are neutralized in some other way (they are prisoners, they can only help sporadically, they don't know about the problem).

Below is an excerpt from my current project.  The kid protagonist travels with a couple of adults, but in particular with a Troll, Grim Grumblesson.  This is the Adults Problem, exacerbated; Grim is a big, powerful adult.  I deal with the Adults Problem in various ways, including this snippet, in which I make Grim Grumblesson a liability.

The heroes are exiting a burning hat factory via a rooftop window.

*   *   *

“Come on!” he yelled to Grim.
Grim nodded, but he held his head stiff and he looked like he was chewing his lower lip with his big tusks.  Something was wrong.
Grim didn’t move.  He looked frightened.  He didn’t look down.
He was afraid of heights.
There was noise inside the building.  Grim turned and pointed his gun back inside the window and pulled the trigger.
Click.
The hammer of his gun was so big, Charlie could hear the gun misfire from forty feet away. 
“Now!” Nathaniel de Minimis shouted.  He spun through the air around and behind Grim Grumblesson and poked him in the backside with his spear.
Grim jumped forward.  He hit the roof hard and shingles scattered beneath him as he started to slide. 
Charlie saw faces at the window, but he had no attention to focus on them.
Grim Grumblesson was sliding towards the abyss, and his eyes were closed.

Monday, August 8, 2011

Martin Silenus on Writing

"Dislinear plotting and non-contiguous prose have their adherents, not the least of which am I, but in the end, my friends, it is the character which wins or loses immortality upon the vellum.  Haven't you ever harbored the secret thought that somewhere Huck and Jim are -- at this instant -- poling their raft down some river just beyond our reach, so much more real are they than the shoe clerk who fitted us just a forgotten day ago?"

(Martin Silenus in Dan Simmons's Hyperion, introducing his Tale)

Sunday, August 7, 2011

Amelia Earhart

And in a similar musico-lyrical vein, the Handsome Family, with "Amelia Earhart".

Saturday, August 6, 2011

Sixteen Military Wives

In tribute to Colin Meloy, author of Wildwood, who is also songwriter of the Decemberists, here is one of their videos.